Post by Derpy on Jun 12, 2017 10:07:46 GMT -5
I just finished this rewritten Arlia questline. I'd appreciate some feedback before I change them out. Criticize these freely.
ALL QUESTS ALREADY DONE WILL BE REWARDED WITH THE PL THEY WERE LISTED AS
Welcome to Arlia
While driving through the asteroid field of Arlia, you notice a light military vessel in the area. You sense many power levels. Many of them are much stronger a normal human, but are nowhere near as powerful as yourself. Before you can investigate, the crew of this mysterious space ship invade one of the settlements! Even more curious, is the fact that the crew includes many different races. Do you want to investigate these strange pirates?
2 Paragraphs OR 4 Paragraphs
+200 PL OR 500 PL
The Merchants of Arlia
Three extravagant space ships approach, piloted by wealthy people in regal. They introduce themselves as Merchants. They are the rulers of the three man-made planetoids. The merchants inform you that they have a piracy problem. They implore a fighter as strong as yourself to aid them. They promise you vast riches in exchange! Will you fight to protect these seemingly defenseless people, or be forced to defend yourself when the group is ambushed?
3 Paragraphs OR 4 Paragraphs
+400 PL OR 500 PL
Second Wave!
It seems like your enemies are reinforcing quickly, and are only getting stronger! What's worse is that they are now firing upon one of the man-made planets! This battle is a close one, and it is becoming clear that you cannot win without sacrifice. One of the Merchants is making a reckless charge in a last ditch effort to save Arlia. They do not survive.
5 Paragraphs
+700 PL
Breather
You may have won battle, but it seems like your enemies are endless! The city has been ravaged. One of the Merchants is dead; if you don't come up with a plan quickly, Arlia as you know it will cease to exist. Will you save the day, or will you take the oppritunity to swap sides?
6 paragraphs
+900 PL
Deal!?!?!
You're efforts have clearly changed the tide of the battle. This contribution is rewarded with a message from the other side. No matter how many times you've switched sides, they offer you a deal far beyond what is believable. Both sides are clearly loaded beyond belief, so it just might be possible. Do you trust these people?
2 paragraphs
+100 PL
The End?
The battle is over, but at what cost? A ruler dead, and another injured. Out of nowhere, you see a pod coming. A Golden pod. As it closes in, you sense that this pod contain 200,000 PL. Stay and fight or run and leave. Goldy's 200k and he has no tolerance for weaklings. Another Merchant does not make it.
GO 3 Paragraphs OR STAY 4 Paragraphs and you must be 100k+
+400 PL ORr 700 PL AND Secret Knowledge about Goldy
Just Another Tuesday
No matter if you had a brief encounter with Goldy or not, you are once again approached by the last surviving Merchant. He informs you with great humor that the Golden power was 'Emperor' Goldy, who has taken control of the Hub: the largest, wealthiest planet. You also learn that these battles are quite common.
1 Paragraph
200 PL
Lessons Learned?
The final Merchant refuses to pay you a penny. These "Merchants" are no better than the pirates that have been plaguing the solar system. Face it, you've been conned. Fraud like this is very common in Arlia. You part with this shyster stronger (and maybe a little cynical).
3 Paragraph
+400 PL AND Street Smarts!!!
While driving through the asteroid field of Arlia, you notice a light military vessel in the area. You sense many power levels. Many of them are much stronger a normal human, but are nowhere near as powerful as yourself. Before you can investigate, the crew of this mysterious space ship invade one of the settlements! Even more curious, is the fact that the crew includes many different races. Do you want to investigate these strange pirates?
2 Paragraphs OR 4 Paragraphs
+200 PL OR 500 PL
The Merchants of Arlia
Three extravagant space ships approach, piloted by wealthy people in regal. They introduce themselves as Merchants. They are the rulers of the three man-made planetoids. The merchants inform you that they have a piracy problem. They implore a fighter as strong as yourself to aid them. They promise you vast riches in exchange! Will you fight to protect these seemingly defenseless people, or be forced to defend yourself when the group is ambushed?
3 Paragraphs OR 4 Paragraphs
+400 PL OR 500 PL
Second Wave!
It seems like your enemies are reinforcing quickly, and are only getting stronger! What's worse is that they are now firing upon one of the man-made planets! This battle is a close one, and it is becoming clear that you cannot win without sacrifice. One of the Merchants is making a reckless charge in a last ditch effort to save Arlia. They do not survive.
5 Paragraphs
+700 PL
Breather
You may have won battle, but it seems like your enemies are endless! The city has been ravaged. One of the Merchants is dead; if you don't come up with a plan quickly, Arlia as you know it will cease to exist. Will you save the day, or will you take the oppritunity to swap sides?
6 paragraphs
+900 PL
Deal!?!?!
You're efforts have clearly changed the tide of the battle. This contribution is rewarded with a message from the other side. No matter how many times you've switched sides, they offer you a deal far beyond what is believable. Both sides are clearly loaded beyond belief, so it just might be possible. Do you trust these people?
2 paragraphs
+100 PL
The End?
The battle is over, but at what cost? A ruler dead, and another injured. Out of nowhere, you see a pod coming. A Golden pod. As it closes in, you sense that this pod contain 200,000 PL. Stay and fight or run and leave. Goldy's 200k and he has no tolerance for weaklings. Another Merchant does not make it.
GO 3 Paragraphs OR STAY 4 Paragraphs and you must be 100k+
+400 PL ORr 700 PL AND Secret Knowledge about Goldy
Just Another Tuesday
No matter if you had a brief encounter with Goldy or not, you are once again approached by the last surviving Merchant. He informs you with great humor that the Golden power was 'Emperor' Goldy, who has taken control of the Hub: the largest, wealthiest planet. You also learn that these battles are quite common.
1 Paragraph
200 PL
Lessons Learned?
The final Merchant refuses to pay you a penny. These "Merchants" are no better than the pirates that have been plaguing the solar system. Face it, you've been conned. Fraud like this is very common in Arlia. You part with this shyster stronger (and maybe a little cynical).
3 Paragraph
+400 PL AND Street Smarts!!!
ALL QUESTS ALREADY DONE WILL BE REWARDED WITH THE PL THEY WERE LISTED AS